as others have noted above, this is a powerful poem. as i read it i felt a visceral response. it must have been difficult as you worked on the poem to make it so concise. but the spareness increases the poem’s effectiveness.
Amazing piece! And for the record, I think there would be no need to replace whatever the person touched before going away. Let’s let it be there and instead cherish the essence of the person( If it’s in a positive sense) or start creating anew( if the person was bad).
You’re right! Thank you for the thoughtful insights. That’s the outlook this person should have. After all, they wouldn’t be the same person had those things not happened.
Chilling. I’ve just begun reading “Focus” and somehow that part of the story (the torture) and this poem get mixed in my mind. (I’m at the part where the young boy is helping them to escape the torture dungeon).
Sarah Doughty 
My core!! Love it
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Awww thank you! 😊 😊
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Powerful. Enjoyed your poetry.
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Thank you! 😊
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geeeeeeeeez! ❤
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as others have noted above, this is a powerful poem. as i read it i felt a visceral response. it must have been difficult as you worked on the poem to make it so concise. but the spareness increases the poem’s effectiveness.
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This is brilliant. Truly. I love it.
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Aw thank you.
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You’re welcome ♥
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Your poetry is so real and raw. I can only take it in small doses because it strikes such feeling – that’s how powerful your writing is so great job
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I know it can be a bit much, but I appreciate it, nonetheless. Thank you.
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I understand this . Moving piece….
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Thank you, love! 😊
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SMASHING (& moving) piece!
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Aww thanks again, love! You’re the best. 😊
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You’re most welcome, Sarah. 🙂
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Amazing piece! And for the record, I think there would be no need to replace whatever the person touched before going away. Let’s let it be there and instead cherish the essence of the person( If it’s in a positive sense) or start creating anew( if the person was bad).
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You’re right! Thank you for the thoughtful insights. That’s the outlook this person should have. After all, they wouldn’t be the same person had those things not happened.
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Reblogged this on O LADO ESCURO DA LUA.
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Chilling. I’ve just begun reading “Focus” and somehow that part of the story (the torture) and this poem get mixed in my mind. (I’m at the part where the young boy is helping them to escape the torture dungeon).
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Ah, wonderful! I’m happy you continue to enjoy them. 😊
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It took only a second to impress me by the diction. love it.
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Oh, thank you! 😊
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Oh boy, Sarah… This is amazingly done. The strength in this is intoxicating.
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Aww thanks, love!
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You are most welcome!
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no matter what’s taken out, you always have more than enough worth salvaging. nice post.
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Indeed. Thank you! 😊
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my pleasure
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anyone is and can be more
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Indeed. 😊
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This could be someone breaking out of an abusive situation or trying to recover from a loved one’s death. Either way, so heart wrenching. 😦
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That’s the beauty of these, so many different ways to interpret them. Thank you! 😊
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You’re welcome! 🙂
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Raw. Emotional. Powerful. Perfect!
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Awww thank you!
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If poetry was a religion, I’d want you to be my guru…. And I am sure many would follow me… 🙂
Brilliant piece again… *love*
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Awwwwww that is so kind of you. 😊 😊 😊 😊
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