“I remember
flying in your
stratosphere,
riding the high
that was you.”
I remember flying in your stratosphere, riding the high that was you. Your eyes. Everything about you screamed to me, “He’s too good for you,” or, “How could I ever be enough?” But the worst was, “I’ll ruin him.”
Though I wasn’t sure why those thoughts hit me in those perfect moments we shared, but they were there, lurking beneath the surface of my eyes.
Could you see it? Could you tell how much I feared I would hurt you?
Read part two here.
© Sarah Doughty
Wonderful!
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I’m glad you liked it.
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I’m nominating you for a Liebster Award. 🙂
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Thanks so much! I’ve received this award already, but I’ll add your name to the list of nominees! 😊
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the rawness of this piece. the honesty. the openness to vulnerability
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Thanks, love. 💕
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always! ❤
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Beautiful! I can’t wait for the next part.
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Thank you, it’s coming up tomorrow. 😊
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And well worth continuing. I particularly like it in verse form.
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Thank you! I really enjoyed writing this one.
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Lovely choice of words!
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Thank you so much! 😊
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geeze, edge of seat , i want more!
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Tomorrow. 😊😊😊
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I really like these kind of duets… Micro-poetry + flash fiction 🙂 Brilliant!
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Aw thank you! 😊
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I hope you narrator’s nerve holds and they stop listening to their undermining voice.
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We shall see. 💕 Thank you so much!
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hey! i really liked your blog!
keep up the good work!
Can’t wait for your next blog 🙂
Thanks!
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Thank you! 😊
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The line “I’ll ruin him” is so telling. The others are generalized fears, but it seems like something specific has to cause her to think that. Not that it would be a legitimate fear, but it makes me wonder why she thinks she’ll ruin him.
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“I’ll ruin him” is like a step beyond the other two fears. Or her one true fear. That she is going to totally ruin everything good going on between them. 😦 (Her being the narrator of the poem. Just clarifying 😉 )
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Yeah… Me, but that will be revealed tomorrow. 💕💕
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I’m looking forward to it. 😀
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Yay! 💖
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😀
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Yeah, unfortunately there’s lots of pain and trauma, things that led her to believe she’s nothing more than a burden.
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arhh….that’s like come on…end it now Sarah (lol)..
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I know, sorry. I didn’t want it to be too long. Thank you!
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what to do…will wait then.
lol..
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Hahaha, I’m sorry. Soon.
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