Sway Poetry Those eyes, how they hold me in their sway. © Sarah Doughty Share this:EmailFacebookLinkedInPinterestPocketPrintRedditTumblrTwitterLike Loading... Related
V. nice – there’s also the lovely play in the word ‘sway’ being close to ‘way’ but softer, more rhythmic, more unsteady. LikeLiked by 1 person
Very well done! That first line, maybe because of the comma, sort of stunned me, kind of like looking at those eyes would have. And then the reader feels that sway in the rhythm in the rest. Love it. LikeLiked by 3 people
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Awesome!
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Thanks so much! 😊
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So beautiful!
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Aw thank you!
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There is a great rhythm in those few words Sarah 🙂
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Aw thanks! 😊
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Sometimes, less is more. Nicely done. 🙂
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Thank you! 😊
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V. nice – there’s also the lovely play in the word ‘sway’ being close to ‘way’ but softer, more rhythmic, more unsteady.
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Yes, I was going for a little alliteration in this one! Thanks for noticing! 😊
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This is quite clever, Sarah.
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Thank you! It was a little short, but I liked how it feels. 😊
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I love succinct and short so I’m not complaining. 😊 You’re most welcome.
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😊😊💕
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Perfection captured eloquently.
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Thank you! 😊
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Very well done! That first line, maybe because of the comma, sort of stunned me, kind of like looking at those eyes would have. And then the reader feels that sway in the rhythm in the rest. Love it.
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Thank you so much! I was hoping for that effect! 😊 😊
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