Defeated

Poetry

Photo credit @rusticbones.

I was lost in oblivion,
searching for you.
After what felt like an eternity,
I collapsed, exhausted,
and admitted defeat.
But then you were there
and lit up my world with your light.

© Sarah Doughty

 For the #NovemberNotes challenge.
Hosted by myself and Rosema of A Reading Writer.
Today’s song is Street Called Mercy by Hillsong United.

50 thoughts on “Defeated”

    1. I start with some idea of concept. I either emphasize the situation, or remember how I felt when it happened to me, and then I write. Once I do, I carefully choose the words and sometimes change some of them to make a greater impact. It’s taken me a while to learn how to do it. It just takes practice. 😊

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  16. When I read this especially ‘But then you were there/and lit up my world with your light.’ I immediately thought of God because He lights up my world with His light. Beautiful piece, Sarah. ❤

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  20. So many of us wish to find ‘that person’ and search and search. I am glad in this instance, that person was found, so often they are not. It is almost a miracle these days! (beautiful words)

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  22. Wow, this is really touching. Thank you for the like on my character sketch, by the way. That character is from my upcoming science fiction story, “Sojourn” of which the first volume will be published in March of 2017. Check out the first chapter on Amazon under my pen name, “Fidus Jungsturm.”

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