I left two dozen daisies by your grave as if it could somehow make up for all my wrongs. As the skies opened up in reply, raining down years’ worth of regrets and sorrows, I understood what you felt in your last moments — abandoned and alone. I fell to my knees and whispered, “I’m sorry,” for the first time in my life, knowing it wouldn’t make any difference.
© Sarah Doughty
For the ‘Support Insta Writers’ August Prompts
(based on books written by authors in the IG community)
hosted by Tracy and Journee.
Two Dozen Daisies by @danielle.a.robbins
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Very nice 🙂
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Aw thank you! 😊
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Just beautiful!
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Thank you so much! 😊
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For some reason, I get the feeling that the narrator was a hit and run driver and he (she?) finally got up the nerve to visit the victim’s grave.
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It’s definitely possible. 😊
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This is powerful.
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Thank you. 😊
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You’re utmost welcome! 🙂
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This is a beautiful and heartbreakingly painful story. I too wonder what happened between them… Really well done. 🙂
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Thank you. So much! 😊 😊
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Powerful. One of your best. Raining down years of regret and sorrow. What a great line.
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Oh, thank you so much! I really like this one too. I feel like it’s calling me, telling me it needs to be finished,Ike the story isn’t over. 😊
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finished, like* the story isn’t over.
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You confused the crap out of me. I know it doesn’t take much to do that, but what do you mean. Lol
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The last comment had a typo. Lol sorry. What I was trying to say is that this piece feels like it deserves to be longer, explored more. There’s lots of questions I’m interested in finding out. 😊
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Thanks for the explanation. Understood.
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Haha, sorry about that. 😆
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Lol
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Where’s the rest this? Short story, novel, whatever. This is a great story, but it’s the donut hole story.
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Yes, I’ve felt that this needs more. What happened before? What happens after? Etc. It’s already on my mind. It makes for an interesting little snippet though. 😊
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Sarah, that was touching, beautiful. Keep it up.
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Thank you!
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if the skies are already crying for him/her, anything you say “wouldn’t make any difference.” subtle inference of condemnation. brilliant.
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Yes, you always catch those little things. That why I adore you. 😊
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that’s so sweet. the feeling is mutual!
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😊💖😊
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oh this penetrates the soul and the heart, love. moving.
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Awww thank you so much! 😊
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always welcome dear Sarah!
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Perhaps it did make a difference, perhaps someone else would learn from his/her mistake and say a sorry before it is too late – lovely as usual 🙂
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Hopefully. Thank you so much! 😊
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Very moving and lovely.
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One paragraph, so many emotions. Definitely overwhelming sadness.
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It is, thank you so much!
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Beautiful writing. It stirs so many emotions and thoughts.
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Thank you! The goal is always to evoke memories or emotion. It’s good to know I’ve accomplished that. 😊
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Heart wrenching but beautiful.
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Thank you! 😊
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You’re welcome ♥
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Very beautiful.
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Thank you! 😊
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Beautiful and tragic. You know how to weave emotions well in your words, Sarah.
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Aw thanks, love. 😊😊😊
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The pity and tragedy of such.
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Indeed. Thank you so much!
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What a heartfelt poem!
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Thank you! 😊
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I agree with Catherine, I want to know what happens next .. you always make me wonder, and that’s the sign of a good writer for definite and you can do it in any form, be it poem or short story or even one liner. xo
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Aw thank you so much! That’s so sweet of you! 😊
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It’s always my pleasure my friend xo
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Heartbreaking as is, but also sounds like the beginning of a story I’d like to read. ☺
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Thank you! I was thinking that I was curious about what happened between them. 😊
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So touching..
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Thank you!
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Breathtaking and yet heartbreaking at the same time.
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Thank you so much.
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So sad 😦
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It is. I find myself wondering what happened between them.
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