The stagnant air suffocates me, like all the oxygen was long since pulled into the vacuum of space. Crimson slush flows through my veins, and icicles have formed around my lifeless heart. I feel the warm bodies around me, but they never penetrate through my iced flesh. With every exhalation of my lungs, I see the fog fall toward the ground. And yet, no one notices that I’m alive, trapped behind this frozen shell.
© Sarah Doughty
For the #MayBookPrompts – Warm Bodies
Photo credit Pixabay.
Powerfully written. Description so perfect. An opening that sucked your readers in. Bravo.
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I’m so happy you liked it!
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Beautiful. Chilling. Haunting. Thank you 🙂
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Oh, thank you! 😊
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i was holding my breath, and now i am rendered speechless.
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Oh wow, thank you! 😊
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you are most welcome. 🙂
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beautiful!
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Thank you! 😊
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You’re welcome! 🙂
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That’s awesome
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Thank you.
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That’s beautiful!
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Aw, thank you. I’m honored. 😊
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Oh my, so perfectly expressed–amazing writing.
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Thank you so much!
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You’re welcome–I’m fascinated by your writing; it’s concise yet so FULL.
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Aw, thank you. I’m honored. 😊
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Most welcome 🙂
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Its pollution ,in air as well in minds of people
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Yes, unfortunately.
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Brilliant and dramatic!
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Thank you, Carol! 😊
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You’re welcome!
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I shivered as if on cue at the end. You’re very visceral, there’s a commitment to intensity there. xXx.
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That’s definitely the goal with my writing. I know this is prose poetry, buy my fiction is a lot like this. Very deep and vivid. At least, that’s what I try for. 😊
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This was just a long way of saying I love this. 🙂
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I know, love. Thank you. 😊
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So…I can’t decide if yesterday’s post or this one is the best I’ve read. Damn it why you gotta make it so hard! Killer work Sarah
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Ha! Thank you. It’s good to hear my efforts are fruitful! 😊 😊
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Oh look, an apple! 😛 You’re so welcome!
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Jeepers, I have to make apple pie now. 😂
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Oh, save some for me! Love me some apple pie.
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I will! 😊
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I’m a fan.
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Well, thank you! I’m honored! 😊
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I love your take on this, just brilliant! 😊
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Thank you! I’m happy you like it!
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Your welcome!
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Excellent. Loved the crimson slush line.
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Thank you!
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This passage really speaks. Beautiful piece you wrote here.
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Thank you! 😊 😊
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Sigh! Beautiful ink
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Thank you! 😊 😊
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