Dust And Memories

I once knew what it felt like to love,
before it withered into dust and memories.
I prayed for anything to restore
what was lost, but nothing answered.
Then, just to end my torment,
I ate my own heart.

Β© Sarah Doughty

For the #MayBookPrompts – Eat, Pray, Love

43 thoughts on “Dust And Memories”

  1. Kick ass. This is one of those rare times when an entire story that could be a lifetime long is told so succintly with so little. Spare and perfect. Not that it matters but this kind of writing inspires, impresses and embarrasses me. More of that Word Ninja business.

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      1. I wrote a post once about how women have the ability to write a novel in between their words, and how much women say with so little. A sort of amazing female haiku. You just nailed it. It took me a long time to see that and appreciate it, the depth in female brevity. The embarassing part is that for many centuries with the written word men have been trying to write the right poem, find the right words, we go on for stanzas and days. Some women, on the other hand, seem to be able to, as you have done, nail it with very little. It is embarassing in that I could work a long time and come up short (or way too long) writing what you posted. See how long winded that all was? Had I said “Because it’s amazing and ‘I wish'” would it be the same? Probably, to a woman. To a man?

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      2. I see your point. However, I spent over a year working on micropoetry, specifically ‘one liners’. In the beginning, I was terrible. But over time I started getting better. I left more to the imagination, left hidden mean by carefully choosing my words, rather than telling someone in detail, exactly what I want them to see. In fiction, it’s a little more precise than poetry, since you want readers to know what’s going on in someone’s mind. Give it a try. See if you can’t take a relatively complicated thought into just one sentence. Leave a bit out, and set the tone with the words you choose – light or dark, happy or sad, etc.

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  2. Wonderful piece – with such a twisted ending – it’s brilliant! (And I think a fitting commentary on the book’s title! Oh, how so non p.c. of me – oh dear πŸ˜‰ )

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