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Him Part Five

“My name is Michael,” he said as we walked. He was still holding my hand and his cool skin against mine set my nerve endings on fire.

Thoughts escaped me as I tried to form a sentence. “I-I’m Tessa,” I stammered, and then my mind went blank as I looked up at him.

Michael’s blue eyes flashed against the light and I did a double take. I only ever saw something like that on a cat before. Never a human.

But then I noticed he still wasn’t breathing.

Instead of that same nervous anticipation I felt since the first moment I saw him, the first wave of fear washed over me so suddenly, it took my breath away.

His nostrils flared and his blue eyes met mine as his lips lifted into a small smile. “I promise you, Tessa,” he said, and the sound of his baritone voice slid over me like a caress, “you will come to no harm while in my presence.”

Deep down, I wanted to believe him. I felt safer with him — that strange man I only met a few moments ago — than I ever felt with anyone in my life.

I couldn’t fathom why. Trust was something that was earned over time, but yet, every cell in my body screamed that he was telling me the truth. That he would keep me from harm.

The longer I was in his presence, the more my body vibrated with the vehemence of my desire for him. But it was more than that. Somehow, I could sense that he wasn’t a normal man.

Perhaps he wasn’t a vampire, vampires didn’t exist — right? But he was special. I could feel it. Judging by the muscles I could see through the material of his clothes alone, I knew he could keep his word if I was in any danger.

He looked to me like a skilled fighter, not so much a skilled lover, but then I thought, maybe, those went hand in hand, and I trembled.

Michael’s grip on my hand tightened a fraction as if he read my mind. Or, at least he picked up on my unease.

Why would I would be in danger at all, whether it was with him, or some other unknown threat?

He stopped walking and faced me, but didn’t let me go. The cool flesh of his other hand reached up and touched my cheek with a gentle, almost reverent touch and my toes curled in response as I tried to remember the simple fundamentals of breathing.

But then I forgot how to breathe completely as he closed the short distance between us and kissed me.

ยฉ Sarah Doughty

This is part 5ย of Him. Read part 1,ย part 2, part 3, and part 4.
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This was also published at UInk.ca.

39 thoughts on “Him Part Five”

  1. The mysteries of death embodied in him… such is where one believes they find trust and peace… In any case, I liked (the last installation, and hence came back to Part 1) the story as it is! ๐Ÿ™‚

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  2. Sarah, I love your writing and your work! I’ve been a bit busy with myself so haven’t been able to look around at all of my followers’ works. I love your style and am hoping that there is a part six, perhaps? I’m not sure. I just love where the story is going. Happy writing, and looking forward to reading some more of your work!
    ~ serendipitouswriter

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  3. Hello Sarah!

    Just finished reading. Even though vampires is not my thing but I enjoy your writing. ๐Ÿ™‚

    Just two small things (hope you don’t mind me pointing them out):

    ‘His nostrils flared and his blue eyes meet mine as his lips lifted into a small smile.’ -> ‘met mine’ (tenses)

    ‘Why would I would be in danger at all, whether it was with him, or some other unknown threat?’ -> would… would… (repetition)


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    1. Ah yes, thank you. I’ll fix those. Sometimes the trouble of drafting these, my phone decides to slip in some words I didn’t want and I fail to notice them all. I’ll fix them immediately. Thank you for reading and commenting! ๐Ÿ˜Š

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  4. The word vampire could be replaced with the attributes of a vampire here and hinted at through all you descriptive elements to allow the reader to be drawn in more slowly and to make it unravel in a subtler way


    1. Yes, it could be. However, this is part five of a longer tale and the whole point of the paid services with him was for a night with a vampire fantasy, which was hinted at up until she really started to suspect him for what he is. There is plenty of subtle indicators as to his physical attributes that would lead people to believe he wasn’t exactly human. Thanks for the critique.


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